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    Lightbulb One Piece, Post TS, your story/improvements

    What would you change, add or remove? And what would you like to see in the future?


    Personally:

    I would start over right at Fishman Island. I'd turn it into a resort where many New world pirates come to relax. Top yonkou commanders, Marine Admirals and bounties over 800 million wouldn't be allowed to enter it, except for Big Mom's. We'd get to see the karate Dojo led by a badass fishman who lived in Roger's golden age. Doflamingo would escape a loss and hide in the swamp of the underworld, sending hitmen after the SHs. To be not continued!

    Some things I'd definitely want implemented are:
    • More individual goal-focused stories of the Strawhats. Like Sanji buying a talisman from a tavern in fishman island that brings "good fortune" in finding All blue. Roronoa Zoro bumping into a swordsman who asks him about his rank. The former all confused, the latter pulls a paper with a list of names of the top 100 swordsmen of the world. Nami hearing about bizarre uncharted places and so on.
    • The revelation of strong bounty hunter groups all over the New World and a possible reunion with Zoro's 2 friends
    • The Marines would double the Shichibukai's count and go on a recruiting spree instead of a certain admiral wanting to undo it
    • The New World 'underground' is a great theme and it should be much more in-depth with clues and confrontations in some arcs until its big main arc arrives (involving Doflamingo 2.0 )
    • Structuring the powerlevels...Structuring the powerlevels...Structuring the powerlevels!

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    Bring back the Big Mom from Fishman Island/Zou.

    Because that is nowhere close to the Big Mom from Whole Cake Island.

    During Fishman Island, we were introduced to a badass, business savvy woman who was a master of rackteering. You only got protection if you paid up. It was a much refreshing change from the boring Whitebeard and Shanks who would protect random islands in the name of friendship. Big Mom was finally showing us what a pirate was supposed to be, and anyone who defied her would have their entire island burned down.



    Then in Zou, we found out she has a vast information network system and she could easily find info on any single person.




    She had the potential to be one of the most intimidating and greatest characters in One Piece but Oda completely ruined her and her crew. She really was one my favourite character during Fishman Island and Zou.

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    Fishmen Isle-
    Have Hody's coupe occur during the 2 years. Hody's idea but it's actually an alliance between multiple Fishmen&Pirate Captains/Bosses with various reasons for dethroning Neptune. Hody crazy, VDD wanted treasure Neptune has involving his "ancestor", Hyozo worked for highest bidder, one secretly is allied with another Yonkou, another the Revs, others hate Neptune for working with a human like WB, some hate Jinbe for becoming a Warlord, some hate Neptune for not helping WB at MF, most evil one makes money from selling his own to Doffy and now working with a CD since Doffy ruined their business pre-MF, some didn't like the deal Jinbe made with BM. BM stays out of FI as long as she gets her food. New captains are a Marlin, Tigershark, Merman, Angler Fish, Coelacanth, Catfish, something Goofy.

    Theses Fishmen have stopping most pirates from entering the NW. SH join with Jinbe to help rescue the Royal Family who were imprisoned because not every Boss wanted them dead. The Princes are stronger this time and help take out most of the Bosses. Some bosses rejoin the Royal Family when they learn the truth of Orihime, Fisher Tiger, and how crazed Hody's gang are. Hody fight goes mostly the same after Luffy takes out the Slave-trading Captain in a Lower-high diff fight. Arc ends the same way. Koala and Hack are introduced this arc but stay in the shadows acting as a contact to one Fishman Bosses. We get foreshadowing Sabo is alive.


    Punk Hazard
    - Goes mostly the same. Tashigi is not a moron. Less scenes involving those damn kids. Caesar tries to abduct Franky. Less chapters involving the poison gas. Caesar keeps most of the SH preoccupied late in the arc by unfreezing the giant prisoners. Better Smoker fight against Vergo, he gets slight scrap with Luffy early on that gets interrupted by Caesar, he does what Kata does to avoid attacks to a lesser level. Caesar taken out same way as he did in the manga. End with Buffalo and Doffy goes the same.


    Dressarosa-
    Riku was smuggled out of the country years ago by Revs and only recently returns when he learns Rebecca has been participating in tourneys. She participates and gets harassed, bullied, and beat-up by Diamante whenever she gets so far in the Tourney. Senior is kind of nice to her. Became as strong as she is from getting beat up your first few goes of it. Toy Soldier trains her too. Most Toys have fuzzy memories of their human lives including Kyros isntead off full or no memories. Revs let Riku come back with Hack, Koala, and Sabo because they tracked Robin's location and timed it with the SH's arrival and also the news of Doffy stepping down from his warlord position.

    Tourney goes mostly the same. Birdcage Survival has the SH's side and Marines softened up by remaining Gladiators before the Joker Pirates engage. We actually see the fights. Fujitora forced Sabo onto Green Bit before Birdcage got up so they wouldn't accidentally hurt civilians and to give himself better excuse for why he didn't take out Doffy himself. Less dwarf shit.

    Zoro v. Pica - Fight has Zoro scaling Pica slicing up anything he throws at him. When he finally catches the real Pica he uses hardened rock armor and they fight for a while. Zoro has issues cutting through armor like he did Das Bones. We learn about how equal Hardening users haki interact and CoC. Zoro is able to cut through when Pica's concentration is lessened after Doffy takes a Gamma knife, he finds Diamante's knocked out, and notices Trebol blowing himself up.

    Trebol- Is a Logia. Fights Cavendish. Also has Logia Observation defense. His CoO also makes him a great Sniper. Cav overcomes it with Split-form slicing him too fast to evade.

    Diamante- Robin helps Kyros fight instead of being a baby-sitter.

    Doffy- Law and Doffy lean towards CoO(not as good as Enel). Law uses cutting ability to free Bellamy from Parasite. Luffy can harden the base of his neck to avoid it. Also uses CoO to avoid strings but not as well as Law. Law uses his observation to tell Luffy when Doffy tries to use it on them. Doffy liberally uses Dark Knight, White Breath, Blight, Overheat, and uses Bellamy as a human shield the whole 1st stage of the fight. Takes control of Law at one point and Luffy knocks him out. Uses Gamma Knife after waking up. After Gamma Knife and Kong Gun knock him down he shrinks Birdcage to contain G4 in a smaller area and it's revealed his string powers were weakened from using such a large bird cage.

    He summons huge tendrils like his Awakening did but also can use parasite on civilians. After Leo Bazooka he reveals he can control unconscious bodies too and takes over many civilians, marines, dwarves, gladiators, and his own men&executives. This Parasite can't use their powers but unlocks their bodies full physical strength at the risk of their health. His Zombie army keeps remaining good guys at bay because Zoro and the like don't want to hurt them. Luffy has issues getting to Doffy due to mix of army, tendrils, and spider-web (Looks like Hellsing Ultimate final Walter&Alexander fights). Law re-enters fight and swaps Doffy into KKG after freeing many zombies with his cuts. Also slices through Spider-Web.

    - No awakening. G4 is less of an overall power-up but still strong. Has further downside of tearing Luffy's muscles when using Boundman. He's just weak from his body being torn up like Goku after Kaoi-Ken and UI afterward.

    Post Birdcage- We actually see what Koala and Hack were investigating, Bart's briefcase(maybe revealed it's a literal nuke or something), and Violet's contact(maybe CD keeping tabs on Doffy). Luffy's alliance forms because they all pissed off the Government and Kaidou at the same time. Not because they randomly decided to ride Luffy's coattails....besides Bart.

    Don't know what to do with Burgess. Don't like that he a 12 foot dude just hides on a ship with a guy like Sabo on board not noticing. Revs should have better security than that. Maybe they take him as a hostage instead but he's tracked somehow.


    Zou- Only thing I'd change is how Capone captured Sanji and Caesar. Everyone just went full retard in this situation.

    Pre WCI-
    We get mini-arc centered on one of BM's Allied captains taking Pudding as a hostage. SH rescue her building some trust, allowing us to get to know Pedro&Carrot more, some small fights for Chopper and Nami, and Luffy gets High-diff fight(doesn't use G4 on purpose) against the captain. Pudding is actually evil and plan was to allow herself to get captured. If Captain won the SH would be dealt with. If they won then troublesome Captain was dealt with without interrupting preparations for the Tea-party. Pudding gets them to WCI. Brook and Pedro do their thing but we see their adventure. Learn more of WCI civilians relationship with Charlotte family. They are long lived by soul swapping, especially with outsiders like opposing pirates, marines, and criminals.


    WCI:
    Idea A(Germa Mini Arc) Original Cracker is real cracker. A copy-man who fights with multiple arms, swords, and shields. Can replicate his entire body but each is half as strong. Luffy takes him seriously and immediately goes G4 when he feels his aura and hear his rank. Nami helps with her Mirage's giving Luffy the edge. Pudding is a troublemaker and has advanced CoO powers similar to Violet(can feel aura's but not see far away). Tells her family Cracker is doing just fine and there is no need to check on him as the fight drags because she doesn't like Cracker and kind of likes the SH(still fine if they die later). She also can change and erase people's short&immediate by just looking at them. Needs to touch to change long-term memory. Does the former to get away with random mischief. Enraged Army scene happens and Sanji scene still happens but Germa take unconscious Luffy on Sanji's request. Niji and Yonji also want to bring Nami with them. Pudding on a Den-Den Mushi vouches for Germa too as an (fake)apology for Cracker attacking the SH.

    Carrot and Chopper defeated Brulee early in Cracker fight and saw all this unfold from Mirrorworld. Pedro and Brook get caught by Capone but he helps hide them. The weaker SH use Brulee's powers to infiltrate Germa's Country. Reiju secretly helps Chopper&Carrot save Nami&Luffy. Luffy is out of commission while SH try to confront Sanji battling special clone squads along the way. Ends with plan Sanji staying due to Zeff and to go through with wedding but passes on plan to release all the sleeping clones so they run amok.

    - When Niji and Yonji see Pudding they want to take Sanji's place.
    - Big Mam is more competent and let SH go with Vinnesmokes because she thought it would be fun to see what they do.
    - Tea Party goes mostly the same but Vinnsmokes knew they would likely be betrayed. Capone betrayal was not anticipated tho. Niji and Yonji decide they want Pudding and Nami. Ichiji also secretly does. The three of them mess things up for their Dad and Sanji after the Tea Party.
    - BM is held off by her strongest kids so she has little role in the arc until he climax.
    - Post Tea-party it turns into a save Nami&Pudding arc.
    - Beat-up Kata arrives late in Germa's land to have the same fight with Luffy. Primarily went to save Pudding and also make up for allowing Caramel's picture to be shattered.

    Idea B- Canon Cracker is defeated when Jinbe shows up to help in a much faster fight. Uses Brulee to meet up with Capone earlier. Goes through with same assassination plot. Vinnesmokes had contingency plan in case they were betrayed. They actually wanted to study her soul powers and learn about Poneglyph knowing most marriage alliances with BM mostly benefit her if not end disastrous for the husband. BM goes crazy when the picture is destroyed and it takes all her elder children and Streusen to hold her off. Streusen gave them their food powers to feed her during her worst tantrums. Harder time calming her due to her anger at her picture and cake being destroyed. While this happens Dai, Smoothie, Oven, Tomago, and Mont'Dor lead chase after Germa, Caesar, Capone, SH, and Fishman Pirates.

    - Bobbin helps against BM too by using his powers to put BM to sleep after eating. 1st crew-member recruited on her way up besides Struesen. Can't put her to sleep this time due to her rage.
    - Kata fight still happens late when SH think they have fully escaped. Uses Brulee to catch-up. Happens because Kata blames himself for letting the picture get broken. Loses because he has injuries from BM.
    - BM can't be calmed by her crew so Sanji is forced to make the cake by Germa and Pudding who are still threatening Zeff(Pudding does soften due to Sanji liking her eye). When her crew fails she begins chase and that's when Kata decides to find and attack SH.
    - BM powers during her tantrum are causing storms all over her territory making an escape difficult even without Oven&Dai's forces giving chase.
    - For assisting their escape Judge lets Zeff go.
    - Some form of 'Badend' happens anyway as the cake just fixes BM food problems indirectly powering her up and focusing her.
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    - Cut down on the PIS, running, and offpaneling
    - Reduce the number of characters, one of Dressrosa's biggest downfalls was that there was too many characters
    - Improve the SH reunion
    - NO MORE CRYING PRINCESSES (or Rikus or Dwarfs)
    - Antagonists would be more serious and competent (looking at you Meme and Seats)
    - Luffy vs Doflamingo would actually be good and not interrupted every six seconds by civilians, Rikus, pushing the Birdcage, etc
    - Jack wouldn't be used as a hype tool for Zunisha
    - Improve the Vinsmoke group and plot or get rid of them altogether
    - No Year of Sanji
    - WCI would end after the castle fell and wouldn't be dragged out by Sanji baking a cake

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    - No Gear 4
    - Luffy and Law beat Doflamingo together
    - No Tontattas
    - Tone down Law’s fruit
    - Give other Supernovas more spotlight over Luffy at times
    - Give Sanji better coverage
    - No Fuji, Sabo, or Burgess in Dressrosa
    - Keep Big Mom and her crew exactly as Avalon mentioned
    - No more Damsels in Distress
    - Give Robin a proper fight
    - Have the other dreams of the Straw Hats be more emphasized again

    - - - Updated - - -

    No Awakening either

    - - - Updated - - -

    Oh, and improve the pacing.

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    Punk Hazard:
    No draggy running
    Have Smoker/Law VS Vergo not be as off-paneled

    Dressrosa:
    Cut out the running and birdcage bullshit
    Make the seats more threatening like have Pica give Zoro atleast a Kaku diff fight, Diamante being able to push Kyros without using cheap tricks and Trebol actually getting a fight.
    Save the tontattas for a arc that is not Doflamingos

    Whole Cake:
    Give Sanji more moments where he shows why he is a M3 member
    Give Big Mom more moments where she shows why she is a yonko
    Give Smoothie more moments where she shows why she is a sweet commander
    Cut out all the running after the explosion up to Luffy VS Kata
    Cut out the skinny Big Mom vs straw hats sequence

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    East Blue arcs: pretty much the same, except I'd introduced haki from the beginning.

    Alabasta: Luffy doesn't defeat Crocodile after getting his ass handled twice with some bullshit blood or something, instead either Smoker or Ace tag teaming to beat Crocodile. It just shows how powerful a warlord is and the monsters of the grand line. And first indication of Luffy being not strong enough. And also Pell dying and a lot more deaths from the battle of the rebels and the kingdom and the Crocodile faction. It just shows how serious the battle was and wss no game.

    Jaya: Nothing much, I guess. It was an awesome arc.

    Skypea: Since Enel is one of my favorite villains and was showed as one of the most powerful pre timeskip villains who also happens to have a op devil fruit. He should be portrayed as exactly how he was before facing Luffy if not more dengerous, an absolute monster, a god who is impossible to overcome until after facing Luffy, instead of him getting absolutely trashed and humiliated by Luffy like in the manga, it will be more evenly mached. This way it will show that even if Enel is a far superior opponent for Luffy, due to devil fruit advantage Luffy was able to overcome him. And of course those guys of Wiper's team that fought Enel personally dies and many more deaths due to Raigou and the destruction of the Skypia.

    Post Jaya: Doflamingo kills all of Bellamy pirates and gives Bellamy a last chance. Just more flavor to Doflamingo.

    Water Seven: Pretty awesome arc, don't feel like changing anything.

    Enies Lobby: Same, wont change anything. Just more deaths.

    Thriller Bark: Stays same just more deaths as above.

    Sabondy: Damn great arc, absolutely won't change anything. Except just give more details to the celestial dragons and the ones Luffy and co dealt with were the lowest class of the world novels, so that in future I can work with them if needed to go that direction and also the fact that I couldn't take those three celestials seriously. And also Hachibi dying.

    Amazon Lily: Nothing much.

    Impel Down: pretty cool except Bon Clay and other dies.

    Marineford: Would've highlighted the whitebeard pirates more so that we could've known more about the other members outside of Ace,Marco, Jozu and Vista. Would've made some of the fights more longer and more detailed like Jozu vs Aokiji, Marco vs Kizaru, all Whitebeard vs Admiral rounds, Garp vs Marco, Sengoku and Garp vs Blackbeard pirates and specially Vista vs Mihawk. I would've nerfed Vista or made Mihawk absolutely casual so that the Vista meme would've never existed. Also would've seen a little round of Shanks and Akainu so that we would have a slight idea of Shank's fighting style. Otherwise, conclusion and everything remains the same.

    Post Amazon lily and the training with Rayleigh remains the same.

    Post Sabondy: Luffy have a rematch with Sentoumaru where Luffy dominates to show that he has improved greatly. Everything remains same.

    Fishman island: Luffy doesn't struggle as much against Hody, the fishman aren't as much bitch and pathetic, they are much more stronger and smarter specially King Neptune and Fukaboshi coz they looked strong but was fodder in the series. And Shirahoshi isn't as annoying. Also those two irrelevant brothers of he doesn't exists. And finally no "Strawhat" cheerings instead the also joins the war against the rebels. This shows they were inspired and got the courage to fight the rebels and also shows their pride as fishman that they won't be saved by freaking humans and also to show that they are a strong tribe. This will show how human and fishman and human can also work together.

    Punk hazard: Since its now the era of worst generation, I feel like its time for another of the Supernova to shine other than Law, so I figured, It would be the most annoying one, Apoo. And instead of Only Ceaser, Luffy will also fight Apoo, coz Luffy's fight against Ceaser was underwhelming. After defeating Ceaser, Luffy will face Apoo and for the first time Luffy found someone who can give him a decent fight. We get to know more of Apoo and his fight abilities and strength but because of the smiley explosion Luffy had to use a secret technique to end the fight quickly. But the ending is off paneled and the only thing mention about this technique is it's not perfect yet and it's basically a gamble since it doesn't last long. And Law vs Vergo last longer and Law doesn't literally one shots. Less running around and dragging. Otherwise everything remains same.

    Post Punk hazard: Doflamingo is still the same as pre time skip. He doesn't shits his pants when Law threatens him by mentioning Kaido, instead he laughs it off like a psychopath and simply choose to go with Law's plan. Coz who doesn't love the Doflamingo that does give a fuck about anything except for entertainment, the Doffy that even threatens world government.

    Dressrossa: Lot less dragging, running and citizens cheering for Lucy or any count down, lot less annoyingness from Rebecca, Fujitora doesn't just sits around and just gambles, he is more in action but when about to stop Doflamingo the CP0 stops him. This just show Doflamingo he has connection with everyone and how great his information manipulation is that he isn't even afraid to blackmail the World government to stop the marines from getting in his way. Also again this is the "careless, doesn't give a fuck" Doflamingo not the one thst gets triggered all the time. And here is were Doflamingo finally Kills the little bitch Bellamy. And for the first time Luffy goes gear 4 on panel. And the reason it was off paneled in PH was because of hype of using it against a more major opponent like Doflamingo and also so that it doesn't seems like an asspull. During Luffy's timeout Whoever got in his way to buy time Doflamingo Literally slaughtered everyone, basically everyone dies whoever gets ih his way in these 10min countdown, until when Viola and Rebecca came to stop the massacre and about to die instead Luffy saves the day. Also more deaths from birdcage otherwise ending and all everything is the same expect more fast paced.

    A certain island where Kaido fell: Basically the same and Apoo betraying the alliance as he was working with Beast pirates to begin with as he was working with Ceaser as an observer and a double agent for the Kidd pirates.

    Zou: Same

    Germa 66 mini arc: Since a yonko arc is too early for the strawhats. The germas are much more stronger and dangerous as they were hyped in Zou to once the ruler of west blue. Jaji isn't as pathetic and far more powerful, almost as strong as Luffy. This is the arc Luffy farther improves his gear 4 and uses tankman for the first time.

    Wholecake island: basically what Ava said about Bigmom, far more dangerous and far less retarded and no mother Cramel bullshits, no hunger tantrum, no running and dragging and wasting time. Here is how it starts, basically Bigmom knows strawhats entered her country from the beginning because she can see through her homies. They splits up, Luffy and the co went to seducing woods as she had planned but lost connection of Pedro and Brook thanks to Peckoms as he knows the blindspots and Peckoms doesn't get kidnapped. Luffy in seducing woods for the first time beats an higher opponent alone without any outside help using full version tankman, where Nami beat Brulee since it's been a long time since Nami fought and Chopper and Carrot beat Randolf and co. Everything goes as it is from here on. Brook gets destroyed by Smootie this time instead of Bigmom and gives Brook to Bigmom as a gift and Bigmom keeps him as a toy. And yes Smootie fucking destroys that door this time. Everything goes same until the planning with Bege to kill Bigmom. The plan to crash the wedding this time is based on the actions of the Vinsmokes as this time the Vinsmoke won't be retarded enough to walk in to a trap without any countermeasures. But everything goes a it went in the manga and the plan to kill Bigmom failing. Bigmom then starts to massacres strawhats and the Vin....Just now that I think of it, about how much of a mass Wholecake island arc is, I give up


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    -Show don't tell. Tired of wading through several chapters of running and crying but not seeing Akainu vs Aokiji on panel.
    -Full fights please. Not pointless fights but getting 2 panels of fighting and 1 finisher doesn't cut it.
    -Don't toss the other Shs aside like Kishi did with the konoha rookies. Luffy is hogging all the spot light.
    -Threat your Top Tiers with respect. I can't take BM and the rest of her retard kids (kaakuri is the only exception) seriously after this shit tier arc.
    -Cut the fat. Oda spends entire chapters on shitty set that never pays off. It took BM an eternity to eat that fucking cake.

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    Oda need to come here to take some story lessons.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Avalon View Post
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    Bring back the Big Mom from Fishman Island/Zou.

    Because that is nowhere close to the Big Mom from Whole Cake Island.

    During Fishman Island, we were introduced to a badass, business savvy woman who was a master of rackteering. You only got protection if you paid up. It was a much refreshing change from the boring Whitebeard and Shanks who would protect random islands in the name of friendship. Big Mom was finally showing us what a pirate was supposed to be, and anyone who defied her would have their entire island burned down.



    Then in Zou, we found out she has a vast information network system and she could easily find info on any single person.




    She had the potential to be one of the most intimidating and greatest characters in One Piece but Oda completely ruined her and her crew. She really was one my favourite character during Fishman Island and Zou.
    found it. Great post will rep soon.

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    Punk Hazard:
    No draggy running
    Have Smoker/Law VS Vergo not be as off-paneled

    Dressrosa:
    Cut out the running and birdcage bullshit
    Make the seats more threatening like have Pica give Zoro atleast a Kaku diff fight, Diamante being able to push Kyros without using cheap tricks and Trebol actually getting a fight.
    Save the tontattas for a arc that is not Doflamingos

    Whole Cake:
    Give Sanji more moments where he shows why he is a M3 member
    Give Big Mom more moments where she shows why she is a yonko
    Give Smoothie more moments where she shows why she is a sweet commander
    Cut out all the running after the explosion up to Luffy VS Kata
    Cut out the skinny Big Mom vs straw hats sequence
    I hadn't realised you were such a power levels obsessed, hype chasing fan

    Yet all the suggestions you've made (apart from a few general 'cut down the pacing' notes) are directly correlated to entertaining both hype and cool fight scenes - and awfully nebulous and lazy ones at that. Shallow.

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