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Game Master
06-25-2013, 06:45 PM
Hey guys... So I wrote a book like 3 or 4 months ago... I only published the first chapter and it's only 5 pages... I have a couple grammar issues since I published it right after I finished it without revision or stuff like that.

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4726509-wings-of-the-nephilim

Do look at it and tell me your opinions ^^

Crispinianus
06-25-2013, 07:16 PM
Who else thought this would be some Erich Van Daniken-esque Ancient Astronaut book? :lmao

X
06-25-2013, 07:18 PM
Shouldn't this thread be in the Millenium Library?

Game Master
06-25-2013, 07:22 PM
Saw your post in the CB GumGum... It's true the description does somewhat sound like Rosario Vampire and stuff... But it isnt lol

Gummy
06-25-2013, 07:24 PM
I didn't say it was, it just reminded me of it. I'm sure your book is better.

Game Master
06-25-2013, 07:29 PM
How about reading it and confirm that yourself :P

Valyrian Steel
06-25-2013, 07:47 PM
Is it good ?

Game Master
06-25-2013, 07:48 PM
I have only met 1 person so far who hasnt liked it really... So you should read it and try it yourself

Pimp of Pimps
06-25-2013, 07:51 PM
I'll check it out later.

Valyrian Steel
06-25-2013, 08:00 PM
I have only met 1 person so far who hasnt liked it really... So you should read it and try it yourself

But is it good ?

Game Master
06-25-2013, 08:01 PM
The write can never comment on his own book like that... I would love to say it's good but it's stupid to say that myself, that's why readers and reviewers exist

Valyrian Steel
06-25-2013, 08:03 PM
The write can never comment on his own book like that... I would love to say it's good but it's stupid to say that myself, that's why readers and reviewers exist

Simple question. IS IT GOOD

Game Master
06-25-2013, 08:03 PM
.... It is...

Valyrian Steel
06-25-2013, 08:04 PM
That wasn't difficult was it ? :D I'll check it out

Game Master
06-25-2013, 09:03 PM
So, anyone read it yet ?

Valyrian Steel
06-25-2013, 09:26 PM
Sorry to bring it to you. It's no best-seller.

My grammar sucks too. Yours is worse, though :lmao

Crispinianus
06-25-2013, 09:34 PM
It has an alright premise, I hope it doesn't turn out generic though.

pizzadust
06-25-2013, 10:09 PM
The first chapter was pretty good. Nice introduction.

Edit: quite was misspelled as quiet,

Game Master
06-25-2013, 10:11 PM
Yea I know my grammar sucked... Most people said the same really... But otherwise the story itself is good, no?

Crispinianus
06-27-2013, 07:28 PM
How long do you plan on making the story?

Game Master
06-27-2013, 07:32 PM
I had originally planned on making it like 10-15 chapters max... But I havent wrote anything yet, just things on scraps of paper in my drawer right now, nothing on Word or anything...

But the continuation of this is something you will never predict... It's something that doesnt go with what most people think anyways

Gummy
06-27-2013, 07:36 PM
Wait, maybe I'm misunderstanding, but are you saying that you don't actually have an overall idea of where the story's going to go?

Game Master
06-27-2013, 07:38 PM
Wait, maybe I'm misunderstanding, but are you saying that you don't actually have an overall idea of where the story's going to go?

LOL... No, I am saying that the next turn of events is something most people arent expecting XD... What kind of a writer doesnt know where his story is going LOL

X
06-27-2013, 07:38 PM
Wait, maybe I'm misunderstanding, but are you saying that you don't actually have an overall idea of where the story's going to go?

I think he is saying the readers will never predict where the story is going because it is so crazy.

Gummy
06-27-2013, 07:43 PM
LOL... No, I am saying that the next turn of events is something most people arent expecting XD... What kind of a writer doesnt know where his story is going LOL

My thoughts exactly when I was under the impression you didn't know where the story was going.


I think he is saying the readers will never predict where the story is going because it is so crazy.

oh wings of the nephilim u so cray cray

Game Master
06-27-2013, 07:45 PM
Do you guys know what Nephilim means by the way?

Tendou
06-27-2013, 07:52 PM
My opinion still remains the same.

Crispinianus
06-27-2013, 07:53 PM
Do you guys know what Nephilim means by the way?

Giants born from angels and human women.

Game Master
06-27-2013, 07:57 PM
Giants born from angels and human women.

Close... But as far as I know... They are hybrids of Angels and Demons... No humans involved

Crispinianus
06-27-2013, 08:00 PM
Close... But as far as I know... They are hybrids of Angels and Demons... No humans involved

The Old Testament says this about them.


Now it came about, when men began to multiply on the face of the land, and daughters were born to them, that the sons of God saw that the daughters of men were beautiful; and they took wives for themselves, whomever they chose. Then the LORD said, "My Spirit shall not strive with man forever, because he also is flesh; nevertheless his days shall be one hundred and twenty years." The Nephilim were on the earth in those days, and also afterward, when the sons of God came in to the daughters of men, and they bore children to them. Those were the mighty men who were of old, men of renown.

Game Master
06-27-2013, 08:02 PM
The Old Testament says this about them.

Well in this story they are hybrids of Angels and Demons XD XD

Tendou
06-27-2013, 08:03 PM
There's no clear definition if that's what your asking for.

Crispinianus
06-27-2013, 08:03 PM
Well in this story they are hybrids of Angels and Demons XD XD

They could just be giants, that would be cooler.

Live Fast Eat Ass
06-27-2013, 08:07 PM
Darksiders > the Bible

Game Master
06-27-2013, 08:08 PM
They could just be giants, that would be cooler.

Gaints are presented later in the story... But technically I cant change the main character's personality or who he is... He has to remain a hybrid of Angels and Demons... But dont worry Giants come in sooner or later

Not to mention that the dragon is a "giant" in himself XP

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Darksiders > the Bible

Putting aside the religion thing, but Darksiders 2 is one of the best fucking games ever created in history

pizzadust
07-22-2013, 11:44 PM
Do you guys know what Nephilim means by the way?

Biblical term for a hybrid race of giants.

Live Fast Eat Ass
07-23-2013, 12:19 AM
You're late to the orgy, Paco.

Allara
05-10-2014, 04:36 PM
Guess this is another failed dream to add to the collection, huh chess

X
05-10-2014, 08:36 PM
Guess this is another failed dream to add to the collection, huh chess

This is a good burn considering that he is no longer on this site.

The King
08-23-2014, 05:10 PM
I read the first five pages and well...you ain't no George Martin. There were a couple of grammatical errors and your narrative PoV went to shit for a while there. Pretty good work, though.